Love Poem: Kumar Abhimanyu
पर्बत चोटियों पर हवाएँ
चली आती हैं
कभी-कभी,
हलचल करती,
बिनबुलाये, यूँ ही|
सुकून?...
अब क्या बताएँ!
जैसे आ जाती है
कभी-कभी,
तुम्हारी याद,
बिनबुलाये, यूँ ही|
चली आती हैं
कभी-कभी,
हलचल करती,
बिनबुलाये, यूँ ही|
सुकून?...
अब क्या बताएँ!
जैसे आ जाती है
कभी-कभी,
तुम्हारी याद,
बिनबुलाये, यूँ ही|
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ReplyDeleteSimple and nice metaphor with the repetition of 'binbulae yuhi'. Feels like a conversation. Consider writing more to it.
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ReplyDeleteA wonderful poem! It has rhyme and rhythm, and the thought expressed is both beautiful as well as logical.The poem works as it is perfectly, but I wish it were longer. This is the beginning of a great poem.
ReplyDeleteHi Abhimanyu. Your poem is so simple and relatable. The attribution to mountains and the blowing winds as with love and memories is very well put out.
ReplyDeleteLike Soumya, I feel like there could be a little more, since it started off so well!