ghazal- hoshi



I remember when you told me the story of a land,
A land you held dear, a land from your memory.

You said the morning sun was never visible in this land,
Because the fog was all you could see from your memory.

You said the hills were covered with alder trees,
That you could almost smell the forest, from your memory.

You said the grasslands exist so souls do not lose their way,
But you have never seen the other side, even from your memory.

You only taught me good things about this land,
So I looked far and wide for this land from your memory.

The morning sun is now visible; it sits above the blanket of fog,
And sun is no longer defeated by the fog, from your memory.

The alder forest now lives under concrete houses,
But I would have liked to see the forest from your memory.

The grasslands are now places for men the hide and ambush,
The path of the soul, now exist only in your memory.

But you tell me, worry not child with the ‘ro’ in her name
For this land will exist, if only in your memory.

Comments

  1. Wonderful! You have written very well. The lyrical tone of your ghazal is beutiful.

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  2. Hi Hoshi!
    Your couplets are so tender, they have this romanticized air about them which I love. There is so much belief in the last couplet that it ties the entire ghazal together, and grounds it in a sense, not denying the poem its mystical air, but making it tangible at the same time. There is an innocence and a sense of maturity that coexist in the narrative voice of the poet persona, something that opens new layers of the ghazal with each read.

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  3. Hey Hoshi! What I really like about this poem and the others that you have uploaded so far is that the concerns in your work are never just aesthetic ones. You always move beyond the literary, to other non-textual contemporary issues which directly affect a certain section of the nation's population. I think that if you make even clearer allusions to the context of your writings it would help the readers to understand them in all their complexity.

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    1. thank you for the suggestion, ill keep that in mind the next time i write

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