Love poem : Rohini Sharma

samay mile to aakr milna,
library ki table par, 
kuch na bolenge hum zubaan se
aur atkenge kitabon par, 
paltenge pejon ko yu hi 
lafz sunenge hazaro par, 
likhe hue letter ka kya karna? 
jazbaat padenge aankho par, 
daaton tale kabhi hot dabate
muskaan chupayenge hoto par, 
samay mile to aakr milna
library ki table par! 

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  1. Shubham AryaFebruary 18, 2019 at 9:58 AM

    Hello Rohini!
    So sweet!
    ये ग़ज़ल के काफ़ी नज़दीक है
    Jesus Loves You!

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    1. UnknownFebruary 26, 2019 at 7:47 AM

      Thank you Shubham! I just wanted to take the experience and to create a poem.

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  2. Dhiman DasFebruary 19, 2019 at 3:27 AM

    A story is going on in your poem. Perfect scene of love is seen. Nicely written.

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  3. Jasmine YadavFebruary 23, 2019 at 3:52 AM

    The excitement and hesitation that results from the new found chemistry between two people is so simply, and beautifully expressed. The smile ko chupane wali line, instantly reminded me of my own moments with a special someone. Also the repetition of the first two lines at the end gives the poem a nice closing- the end of the poem is an invitation, which is lovely! :)
    I had one suggestion. In the line, "samay mile to aakr milna," Could you break the line like :
    "samay mile to,
    aakr milna,"
    The line break and pause would add a bit of suspense, curiosity and a kind of playfulness I think!

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    1. UnknownFebruary 26, 2019 at 7:55 AM

      Okay!! Firstly, I thought it to break the line but when I again read it I realized that it will work with the whole line in one sentence. Again, if I would get a chance to write it again I will do the broken line. And, it is a lot to me that my poem reminded you some wonderful moment in your life. Thank you so much for the suggestion. I will definitely do the break lines in my other poem.

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  4. AnonymousFebruary 23, 2019 at 8:39 AM

    This is such a beautiful narration about your thinking. kafi asan shabdo ka chunav karte huye apne mann ki baat kahi hai..:)

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  5. UnknownFebruary 26, 2019 at 8:06 AM

    Ji shukriya!!

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